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Butterfly Dream: Refugees Haiku by Lavana Kray

English Original
boatload of refugees --
the wind playing with a doll
on the shore
Third Prize, 2016 European Haiku Prize

Chinese Translation (Traditional)
滿船的難民 --
大風不斷地吹滾
岸邊的娃娃
Chinese Translation (Simplified)
满船的难民 --
大风不断地吹滚
岸边的娃娃

Comment :
" L1 establishes the thematic and emotional context while Ls 2&3 effectively evoke a keen sense of sadness. And on a second reading, the wind and the doll successfully carry symbolic significance.

This heart-wrenching haiku reminds me one of my haiku:

Aegean shore ...
soaked teddy bear
and dead child

Featured Poet, Coviews, January 2017"
                                                                         Chen-ou Liu

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Never Ending Story - First English-Chinese Bilingual Haiku and Tanka Blog, by Chen-ou Liu

English Original

when the sun sinks low
refugees' shadows conglobulate
over the wired border ...
a tender lullaby
softens the wind

Back Cover Tanka, Ribbons, 12:1, Winter 2016


Chinese Translation (Traditional)

當太陽西沉
難民的陰影縮擠
在鐵絲網邊界 ...
溫柔的搖籃曲
削弱了大風

 Chinese Translation (Simplified)

当太阳西沉
难民的阴影缩挤
在铁丝网边界 ...
温柔的摇篮曲
削弱了大风

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